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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 2:40:19 GMT 8
PINKIES’ LOVE FOR DANIEL
Daniel Lee’s MIMPI became reality Gaining more and more popularity Your singing drifts the fans away Being who you are is the way.
No doubt your schedules are tight Only HEAVEN KNOWS how hard you fight Just in two months time Your album is set to FLY.
After weeks of planning and saving Fans are ready for shopping Even parents are not stopping their children from supporting.
Mature fans are never left out Joining the young fans shouting out loud Family, friends and fans are very proud We are all THE LUCKY ONEs, there is no doubt.
Some are old, some are new But we are united as one because of you IRRESISTIBLE love and cheers are all for you Every Pinky LOVES TO SEE YOU.
DFC voting squad is formed Punching votes is our job Putting FEI at the top 988 and Ai.FM are our spot.
MIMPI is top in Red and Xfresh But YOU JI in MY.FM is still fresh I DON’T KNOW when it will dash But Pinkies will try their very best.
Finding ORGANIC LOVE is not easy Experiencing SECOND CHILDHOOD will be interesting But the first CHOICE must be your singing Pinkies hope you will succeed.[/b] ;D ;D ;D p/s: I wrote this in the middle of studying for my finals.. Please give your comments.. Should I edit or add anything? Whoever going for the autograph session on 9th Dec in Park Royal, Penang, and plan to do a card for Daniel, you can include this poem... I don't have the time and not creative enough to do a card
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kimsng
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Jesus is true love
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Post by kimsng on Dec 5, 2005 2:49:28 GMT 8
cool i rate it 8/10.
but hey ur line on 'we r the lucky ones' does not rhyme.try to make it all rhyme .would be cool.good job.
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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 2:52:46 GMT 8
cool i rate it 8/10. but hey ur line on 'we r the lucky ones' does not rhyme.try to make it all rhyme .would be cool.good job. Thank you If I were to edit that line, I don't know where I can put in the song title "THE LUCKY ONE" Any idea??
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kimsng
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Jesus is true love
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Post by kimsng on Dec 5, 2005 2:56:49 GMT 8
lol if u dont mind i can help u wif the poem
sorry i a lot of comment,anyway ur poem is like too chinese rated style,make it more eng style like rap,would sound great.
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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 3:02:40 GMT 8
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kimsng
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Jesus is true love
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Post by kimsng on Dec 5, 2005 3:04:11 GMT 8
as in like sumthin u can sing to,not like just normal pantun...boring ler...anyway just my opinion dont get too offended or anything
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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 3:05:49 GMT 8
It's ok kimsng... I still prefer it to be pantun, cos IT'S MEANT TO BE A PANTUN ;P
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kimsng
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Jesus is true love
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Post by kimsng on Dec 5, 2005 3:09:32 GMT 8
ok then gd luck on ur poem
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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 11:51:30 GMT 8
cool i rate it 8/10. but hey ur line on 'we r the lucky ones' does not rhyme.try to make it all rhyme .would be cool.good job. Thank you If I were to edit that line, I don't know where I can put in the song title "THE LUCKY ONE" Any idea?? I've added "there is no doubt" at the end of the sentence. So, now it somehow rhyme...
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Post by melody on Dec 5, 2005 11:56:33 GMT 8
Brilliant Soursand, you are definitely good at this. The one you did earlier on all his songs was also brilliant. Only 1 correction - punching codes is our job instead of are. Keep it up...
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Post by soursand on Dec 5, 2005 12:02:29 GMT 8
Brilliant Soursand, you are definitely good at this. The one you did earlier on all his songs was also brilliant. Only 1 correction - punching codes is our job instead of are. Keep it up... Thanks a lot melody... My grammar memang teruk want..I don't deny that... But still beria-ia wanna write ;D
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Post by liliansoh on Dec 5, 2005 12:11:31 GMT 8
Soursand
Great Job. ;D
I really really like your Pantun. ;D
Mark 101% excellent Pantun. ;D ;D
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Post by lilywhite on Dec 5, 2005 12:22:21 GMT 8
WOW!!! Soursand, you are marvellous.. So many Poetry here. I love this forum, as IH said this forum will be a fun and educative forum. Thanks for everything.
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Post by teng on Dec 5, 2005 12:48:47 GMT 8
Hey Lisa ! Great one on you !!! =) sO NICEEEEEEEEEE !! =D
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Post by piggygrace on Dec 5, 2005 13:09:31 GMT 8
Geee!!! You are a poetic girl....!!!
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